初中英语作文评析

My dad

My dad is my first teacher and my important friend. I often used to sit on my dad knees and listening to him the stories when I was a younger. He gives me the dream about a little girl and he told to me try me best to help people who are in the trouble by tolding these stories. But my dad isn’t so kind every moment. Sometimes I saw a classmate with the matter didn’t go to Kindergarten when I was in Kindergerten. I felt that is really good. So I cheated with my dad and I enjoyed myself outdoors. Later, my dad learned about that, he was angry with me, he pulled me to my bedroom and fine me stand facing the sister’s desk for several hours. I know that my dad hoped me will get good grades, so he was angry when he knew that I cut class to play. Since then, I no longer cutting class, and even I have been early to go to school, because I don’t want to make my dad disappointed. In my growing, my dad is always accompanied me, taught me a lot of things, I was very grateful to him. I want to say to my dad “I love you, my dad!”

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I often used to sit on my dad knees and listening to him the stories when I was a younger.

he told to me try me best to help people who are in the trouble by tolding these stories.

Sometimes I saw a classmate with the matter didn’t go to Kindergarten when I was in Kindergerten. 不知道想要表达什么意思？且有拼写错误

I know that my dad hoped me will get good grades, so he was angry when he knew that I cut class to play.

I no longer cutting class

me stand facing the sister’s desk for several hours.

my dad is always accompanied me, taught me a lot of things,

作者从生活的'小事说起，表达对父亲的感激之情，很真挚，很感人。