SAT作文修改实例讲解
On the thesis, one may have doubt since not all the memories are sweet. But I insist that even the bad ones can offer help. For instance, during my winter vacation in Junior, I lost a cell phone that I had used for more than two years. That was the day before the Spring Festival, the most important festival for reunion in China. I was in a good mood at that time because I was going to shoot some photos with my aunt. There were many people in the store. 3I felt a little crowded. It was the time when we were choosing the frames that my cell phone was stolen. Too late did I realize the unfortunate fact. (营造记忆)
Afterwards, whenever I was in public, I paid extra attention to my personal possession such as my purse and mp4. Therefore, I havent lost any other things till now. I learned to be extremely careful from the horrible memory. (营造收获)
分析:
1 during强调延续性,in强调一段时间里发生了一件事。所以此处应该改成in.
2 文章采取倒叙手法,所以在2处感觉有一点奇怪,刚刚还是东西被盗,后来心情又好了。
3 不能是你觉得挤,只能是that place was a little crowded
4 文章的深刻度不够,处于4-5分的水平,要拿更好的分数,还得在深刻性上下功夫。个人例子特别适合以情动人。
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